Promotional poster

Roughcut + audience feedback

Our audience feedback has shown us that we need to cut down our killing scene, because the longer the shots the more chance there is for the audience to pick up on details which seem fake and decide the whole scene is unrealistic, therefore jepodising the entire film.

Another part of the opening which needs editing is the scene with the car, as it is too long and adds little to the plot line we have decided to remove it completely, leaving more time for narrative at the camping scene.

Revised storyboard

Initial story board

Screenplay

THE MOORS

By Emma Graveling, Melissa Hodgson and Emmie Bryett

POST PRODUCTION SCRIPT – 20^TH APRIL 2010-04-20

EME PRODUCTIONS

21 CHURCH STREET

LS29 9SV

 1. EXT: MOORS CAMPSITE – DAY

Four teenagers aged 17 are sat around outside a tent. Two boys, GEORGE and JORDAN, both dressed in jeans and hooded tops and two girls, ANNABEL and KELLY, ANNABEL is dressed in jeans, a high cut top and a long sleeved cardigan. KELLY wears jeans and a low cut white vest, despite the cold weather. JORDAN and KELLY stand with their arms around each other. ANNABEL looks uncomfortable and appears to not be included in their conversation. KELLY grabs JORDAN'S hand.

KELLY

come on Jordan lets go (they walk off together)

GEORGE turns to offer ANNABEL a beer.

GEORGE

fancy a beer? (passing beer to her)

ANNABEL

(shaking her head) nah I’m ok thanks I don’t drink

  GEORGE turns to face away from her and makes a face.

2.    EXT: MOORS CAMPSITE – DAY

KELLY and JORDAN return to camp, KELLY adjusts her top and   JORDAN fastens up his jeans. GEORGE hands them both a beer and they sit with the rest of the group.

KELLY

(shivering) is anyone else kinda cold?

GEORGE

maybe you should wear more clothes

KELLY

shut up George!

GEORGE

right guys I'm off for a slash

KELLY

bye

JORDAN

I reckon we should get a fire going?

KELLY

yeah shall we go get some wood for it?

JORDAN

you go ahead I'll catch up in a bit

KELLY

okay see ya in a bit then (walks away)

3.  EXT: WOODS – DUSK

KELLY walks alone down a path to collect wood for the fire. A man watches her and begins to follow her down the path. As she approaches the bottom of the path she drops her beer, as she stand back up the man, dressed in a black hooded top and tracksuit bottoms, grabs her from behind.

KELLY

(screaming hysterically)

The man plunges the knife into her chest, then drags her dead body away.

Soundtrack

Soundtrack:

We created our own soundtrack on Garageband, this means it is copyright free.

The opening scene and the title screen use the same extract of music, we composed it in the hope of creating a tense atmosphere. 

The music we composed for the kill scene is different but also aims to create a tense atmosphere by affecting somebodies heartbeat.

There is also a small extract of music which plays to signify that somebody is watching them.

If we made our whole film we would re-use the same piece of music for each kill scene, to signify to the audience another character is about to die. This is used in may horror films such as 'Halloween' 'Friday the 13th' and 'Sleepaway Camp'.

Again we would re-use the small extract for every scene which is a p.o.v shot from the killers pespective, the prefered reading would be that each of these shots is where the killer is watching the camp.

Audio:

We used a boom mike whilst filming during the camping scene so our audio for the dialogue is high quality, this meant we didn't have to gather our cast and re-record audio for the scenes. However one negative point is that this picked up the sound of the rain despite how we attempted to hide that whilst filming.

For the killing scene however we only had camera audio, so we used the voice recorder to re-record our character screaming, and extracted all the rest of the audio.

For the sound effect of the scream queen being stabbed Emmie recorded the sound of a melon being stabbed, a method used by Alfred Hitchcock in 'Psycho'. This is the vodcast of her doing this recording.

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I also input some sounds from 'iMovie' itself, such as the birds chirping in the background. I put this in because otherwise it was silent and this helped achieve verisimiltude as the film opening is set outdoors. Also whilst our scream queen is being followed i input some footsteps, because of the background noise I'd had to remove audio and again if i had not it would have been silent which wouldn't be realistic because it was so quiet you wouls hear her steps. Unfortunately i couldn't find anything to put it when she drops the beer, but it isn't exceptionally noticeable.

Distributor, budget + exhibiton

Distributor:
Warp Films and WarpX are low budget, digital film production companies, and have released horror slasher films such as 'Donkey Punch' and 'Dead Man's Shoes'. They distribute their films with Optimum Releasing.

As our film is a low budget, digital production set in the north of England, Optimum Releasing would be suitable.

Budget:
A typical film of the horror genre is low budget, around $1,000,000
1983's 'Sleepaway Camp' was a low budget slasher of its time with a minimalistic budget of just $350,000
More recent low budget slasher productions such as 'Donkey Punch' had a budget of $1,000,000
Besides the cost of tapes and dvd discs our production was entriely free as we borrowed equipment, such as the boom mike and the tent. We made the blood ourselves, and characters dressed in their own clothes. The location was entirely free as was transport to and from. If we were to produce the entire film the budget would still be incredibly minimalistic as we would probably continue to borrow what we needed for free, or create our own, eg. fake blood.

Exhibition:
Films such as this often have a very short running time if they make it box office. for example, 'Sleepaway Camp' was on 85 screens for the opening weekend only.
It is likely our film would be a straight-to-DVD film exhibition. It is also unlikley it would ever be released on DVD outside of the UK as there is no cross-over appeal to US audiences within our film.